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Bubbles gently floated towards the surface as Rose’s bright reddish-pink hair swayed in the ebb & flow of the water. Rose’s relaxed sleeping face complimented the light breaths coming out from her mouth.
“Mmmm…can…dy…” she mumbled in her sleep.
She flipped over on the sea moss-covered rock she was sleeping on. Her arms, which had been close to her chest, rolled off to hang off the sides of her rocky bed.
Slowly, Rose began to float from her rocky bed.
She gasped. Her eyebrows lifted, her eyes still closed. “I’m…zz..fly…ing…wow…zzzz…candy!”
She rose up through the depths of the ocean and up to the moonlit surface. The waxing gibbous moon and the glittering stars reflected on the ocean’s waves that carried Rose away.
The ocean continued to carry Rose across its surface, carrying her further and further away from where she had been. The moon and stars above soon began to fade into the oncoming dawn.
Mellany closed the door to her beach house behind her. She walked down her steps and onto the sandy beach. Her boots caused the sand to make crunching sounds beneath her as she headed towards the shoreline.
You could still see the darkness of night up in the sky, but dawn was quickly approaching just beyond the horizon of the ocean. Mellany stopped at the shoreline, faced the orange-coloured sky, and took in a deep breath. The air was just crisp enough to satifsy her.
Mellany closed her eyes and smiled, listening to the gentle ocean breeze running past her ears and the seagulls calling to each other. She soon turned her face towards the sun, peaking up over the ocean.
“Good morning, sunshine,” she greeting.
Now, what to do today…
Mellany began to walk once again along the shoreline.
This was a typical morning routine for her – there was something about the cool ocean breeze, the gentle crashing of the waves, and the noisey seagulls all before the sky was fully lit that helped to clear her mind and set up her day.
She looked out into the ocean as she contemplated her day, awaiting for an idea to drop into her head like it normally did. Sometimes something would happen in the water that would give her mind the exact jolt she needed to come up with a great plan. Sometimes it would be a dolphin jumping up in the far distance, other times, a wave that was a bit bigger than usual. Regardless, it was something that fully woke her up and inspired her through the whole day.
Mellany halted as something bobbing a short distance away caught the corner of her eye. She curiously looked at it.
She took a few more steps forward to get a bit of closer look, stepping into the waves. Her eyes widened and she gasped.
Mellany turned around, calling into all directions of the shore: “Lifeguard! LIFEGUARD!”
Mellany stared out into the shoreline void of any human life, besides from herself.
She grabbed her head.
There’s no lifeguard at this time in the morning!
Mellany began to take off her black fingerless gloves. “Welp, I guess it’s something I just gotta do myself.”
She began to remove the rest of her clothing: her white-midrift jacket with rolled-up short sleeves with black cuffs & collar and two breast pockets, matching white shorts with black cuffs, black socks, and black boots. She was left wearing her black bathing suit that acted as her regular shirt.
Mellany laid them all down far enough from the ocean waves.
As soon as her last piece of clothing was removed, she hopped into the water.
She swam over to the head bobbing just above the water’s surface and wrapped her arm around their waist. She swam back to shore as fast as she could, holding the person tightly.
Mellany quickly scanned the person. A girl, mostly likely around her age, with bright reddish-pink hair, two necklaces, a belt, and a lacey baby doll that split just under her chest down all with a rose motif and…
…fins and a tail.
Mellany screamed and promptly dropped the half-human creature. She scurred away on her hands and feet, just as the creature stirred awake.
“Huh?” the creatured murmured. “…wet…sand…water…foaaaaaam….aaaaaaiiiir…”
The creature’s eyebrows raised, her eyes flittering open. “Hmmmmmm?”
“Oh, did a float to the surface again?” the creature mumbled. She pointed to her lips in thought, looking down at the sandy beach. She lifted up her head, finally noticing the bewildered Mellany.
“Who are you?”
“WHAT ARE YOU?!”
The creature giggled. “Oh, I’m a mermaid, silly!” she said as she lifted her tail full out of the water.
Mellany stared at the mermaid.
Then she let out a scream.
The mermaid’s face lit up with delight. “Your name is ‘AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH’? Wow! What a pretty name! it sounds a lot like ‘ah’!”
Mellany stared at the mermaid once more, this time less bewildered and puzzled. She wasn’t sure if she was supposed to laugh, scream, fight, or what.
“No,” finally replied Mellany. “I’m Mellany.” She raised an eyebrow. “Who names their kid after screaming?”
“Ooooh!” the mermaid said, clapping her hands together. “I thought that might have been some weird human thing! Tee hee!”
“I’m Rose, nice to meet you!”
Rose, the mermaid, began to crawl towards Mellany. In a panic, Mellany crawled further away.
“No way,” Mellany rasped. “You CAN’T be real!”
Rose pulled her head back in surprise, just before giggling again. “Oh, Mellany! You’re so silly. Of course, I’m real! I’m right in front of you.”
Mellany’s eyes glanced over Rose. “Yeah, I know.”
She then looked Rose straight in the eye. “You’re not going to drown me, are you?”
Rose paused for a moment, just before letting out unabashed laughter.
Her arms buckled and she fell down to the wet sand, grasping her stomach. She began hitting the sand with one of her hands.
Tears began to stream down Rose’s face. “Ow! My stomach..my stomach hurts now!”
Mellany tensed up. “That wasn’t supposed to be a joke.”
After a good moment more of unrestrained laughter, Rose quieted down. She looked up at Mellany from where she laid on the ground, still holding her stomach.
“Gee-whiz, you humans sure are funny!” She wiped a tear from her eyes. “Nobody does that anymore!”
Rose paused for a moment.
“Well, almost nobody.” She shrugged.
Rose took a deep breath, fully regaining her composure. She pushed herself up off the ground, giving Mellany a big, friendly smile.
“Certainly not me, no siree!”
Mellany stared at Rose’s glittering eyes intensely.
She finally let out a sigh. She let her tense body relax for a moment, before getting up off the ground. She brushed the sand off from herself.
“I thought you were someone drowning, so I tried to save you.”
“Oooh! That explains a lot! I was wondering why I was so close to land! I don’t usually float that far.”
Mellany began putting the rest of her clothes back on. “You normally float to surface?”
“Yeah, all the time! I don’t know what it is, but I can’t seem to keep my body heavy enough to keep me down below!” Rose giggled.
“Am I?” asked Rose. She paused for a moment. “Well, I guess I am, even by mermaid standards…”
Mellany yanked her jacket forward, her shoulders raising up with it. “Do you know how to get home from here?”
Rose looked over her shoulder at the ocean. Her eyes narrowed. “Hmmmm…” She turned back to Mellany. “Yeah, I think so.”
Mellany forced a smile on her face. “Great. Now, shoo.”
“Huh?! You want me to leave?!” exclaimed Rose. “But…but I want to know more about you!! Are all humans like this?”
Mellany held out her hand, turning away from Rose. “I want to go back to denying your existance.”
Rose became dejected.
“D-deny me? Isn’t that like me denying a human?” she cried.
“…you’re a mermaid. I grew up being told mermaids aren’t real. Yet, here you are, in front of me…”
Rose fell back into the sand, laying on her side. She took the bottom of her shirt, knawing on it. “But I AM real…and I DO exist…why are you humans so weird? Don’t you have stories about us?”
“Yeah, we do, like fairytales and stuff.”
“What are ‘fairytales’?”
Rose turned to bury her face in the sand. “Fiction…we are…fiction…”
Rose began to sob.
Mellany flinched. She turned her eyes towards Rose’s tail smacking the water between each sob.
Mellany brought her hand to her chest. Her shoulders lowered. She let out a sigh.
Mellany took a few steps forward and knelt in front of Rose. She placed one hand on the mermaid’s shoulder. “Hey, I’m sorry…don’t cry.”
Rose perked up. Mellany quickly retracted her hand.
Rose sniffled and rubbed her eyes. “You’re forgiven.”
Mellany and Rose exchanged smiles.
“Are humans always up this early?”
Mellany shrugged, leaning back to easily talk to Rose. “I dunno. Some are.”
Rose shifted her own position, using her tail to act like a chair. “Ooooo. What were you doing up so early?”
“I usually wake up this early. It’s quiet enough for me to think.”
“Do you have hard time think at other times of the day?”
Mellany shook her head side to side in thought. “Hmmm..sometimes.”
She stopped nodding her head. “I plan the best in early morning.”
“What were you planning to do today?”
Mellany frowned. “I was figuring that out when I saw you.”
Rose covered her mouth and giggled. “Oh! Oops. Sorry about that.”
He could see the two young woman – one a human with coal-grey hair half-shaved, half fashionably cut that was shorter in the back than in the front with bangs, a neckalce, dark tan skin, and white clothing with accents of black; the other one a mermaid with bright reddish-pink hair that jut barely reached her shoulders , messy as if the wind pulled it into a thousand directions, with cream-coloured skin, fins, a tail, and an overall rose-motif to her clothing & accessories.
He had been watching from behind the shack since the human pulled the mermaid out from the water. If he had been completely honest, he had arrived early to specifically look for others. It seemed, however, the universe was on his side today.
He’s lips twisted up and lifted his wand that glinted as the sun hit its tip.